This week for literacy we have been writing stories based on a visual prompt. Th is the story and picture for today, my two goals are to have flowing paragraphs and sentences that have correct grammar. I think I have achieved these two goals by reading through my story and correcting all the grammar mistakes and making them all correct, and making sure that the sentences make sense.
The poppies that surround me are tangled up in the lethal barbed wire. Looking at the poppies, all I can think of is the poppies red blood that is pouring out of my chest and onto the bullet covered ground. I know that I was not the only one that has been injured by the enemies weapon. I can hear them grunting and groaning. I can’t save them. But I can save myself. 
Hi Isla I like how you gave a description on what we were doing insted of just writing the storie. i like the phrase tangled up in the lethal barbed wire.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment Meg.
ReplyDeleteI hoped you liked the story.
Isla