Today I wrote a story based on the prompt - the animal crossing.
Animals poured onto the road, like a flood of water pouring into a pool. The noise was excruciating for my ears, trunks blowing, lions roaring and duck quacking. They seemed to stick to their groups, African animals, farm animals and other animals. People were tooting their horns and police officers surrounded the chaos, their guns and shields held high. And then, like someone pushed the pause button, they froze, not even a blink of an eye. It all went silent.
The elephant blew its trunk and they ran, they ran like something was about to eat them for dinner. But thats the ironic part, there was something trying to kill them. A massive dinosaur looking animal was chasing after them, they had disappeared off the zebra crossing and they were heading for the park.I turned on my ignition and backed up ramming into other cars. I had no clue what to do.
Kia ora Isla,
ReplyDeleteYour writing blew me away. It is incredibly descriptive but very clearly crafted and well thought through. You have a gift at shaping words. I've shared it with some of my teacher friends because I think it is so good.
It would have been great to have included the prompt as part of the post too, so we could see what inspired you.
Keep up the incredible writing and blogging,
:) Sharon - Te Ara Tūhura Education Programme Leader
Tena koe Isla,
ReplyDeleteThis took my full attention from your first sentence; what a great simile!
You have thought carefully about every word and what type of sentence you will write. I really want to read the next paragraph…
Like Sharon said, I would have loved to have seen the prompt. Keep being a fabulous blogger and sharing your writing with the world.
Ruth - Teacher friend of Sharon’s all the way down in Invercargill😁
Thank you for the comments. Next time I will put the prompt onto my story !
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